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Post by glimmer on May 25, 2016 3:17:57 GMT -5
All right but it is very difficult for me! I managed to keep to it for only two lines: sitting at the pond mosquito army attacks thunderbolt hits them Cool imagery zin. You could abbreviate it further which I think could add even more impact .. however I guess you are going for 5/7/5. Abyway I love the pond .. army .. thunderbolt
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Post by glimmer on May 25, 2016 3:21:51 GMT -5
gulls & twilight - photo haiku nice! Really nice photo .. the way you've captured the angle of the wings .. for me anyway
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Post by zin on May 25, 2016 3:22:21 GMT -5
All right but it is very difficult for me! I managed to keep to it for only two lines: sitting at the pond mosquito army attacks thunderbolt hits them Cool imagery zin. You could abbreviate it further which I think could add even more impact .. however I guess you are going for 5/7/5. Abyway I love the pond .. army .. thunderbolt Yes it was 5-7-5 and generally it is not enough for my babbles! But when I read what you just wrote (photo haiku) I thought things can be simpler, yes .. Actually I did hear it is not a strict rule (5-7-5).
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Post by zin on May 25, 2016 3:26:04 GMT -5
nice! Really nice photo .. the way you've captured the angle of the wings .. for me anyway which photo? maybe you talk about jly's photo?
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Post by glimmer on May 25, 2016 3:27:53 GMT -5
Cool imagery zin. You could abbreviate it further which I think could add even more impact .. however I guess you are going for 5/7/5. Abyway I love the pond .. army .. thunderbolt Yes it was 5-7-5 and generally it is not enough for my babbles! But when I read what you just wrote (photo haiku) I thought things can be simpler, yes .. Actually I did hear it is not a strict rule (5-7-5). It is up to the writer! You can do 5/7/5 .. an artform in itself .. or brevity .. oror a total of 17 syllables in whatever layout you like .. and no of lines I have seen is between one and four! IMHO it is all poetry.
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Post by glimmer on May 25, 2016 3:30:48 GMT -5
Really nice photo .. the way you've captured the angle of the wings .. for me anyway which photo? maybe you talk about jly's photo? Perhaps it was .. I'm having an issue accessing the forum on a cellphone .. hence a few typos to boot .. but yea .. credit to the gull photo whoever took it!
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Post by zin on May 25, 2016 3:34:41 GMT -5
Yes it was 5-7-5 and generally it is not enough for my babbles! But when I read what you just wrote (photo haiku) I thought things can be simpler, yes .. Actually I did hear it is not a strict rule (5-7-5). It is up to the writer! You can do 5/7/5 .. an artform in itself .. or brevity .. oror a total of 17 syllables in whatever layout you like .. and no of lines I have seen is between one and four! IMHO it is all poetry. Yes all poetry... and I think when it is in favor of simplicity rules *can* be flexible! About the pic - it is jly's.. I will put one with a different flavor (silver said rich people would buy it!) :
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Post by glimmer on May 25, 2016 3:49:34 GMT -5
It is up to the writer! You can do 5/7/5 .. an artform in itself .. or brevity .. oror a total of 17 syllables in whatever layout you like .. and no of lines I have seen is between one and four! IMHO it is all poetry. Yes all poetry... and I think when it is in favor of simplicity rules *can* be flexible! About the pic - it is jly's.. I will put one with a different flavor (silver said rich people would buy it!) : Hehe .. the rich buy a path to the moon
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Post by zin on May 25, 2016 3:55:19 GMT -5
Yes all poetry... and I think when it is in favor of simplicity rules *can* be flexible! About the pic - it is jly's.. I will put one with a different flavor (silver said rich people would buy it!) : Hehe .. the rich buy a path to the moon That's good too! It's really a sun which looks like a moon.. and all the same for a poem.
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Post by glimmer on May 25, 2016 4:06:24 GMT -5
Hehe .. the rich buy a path to the moon That's good too! It's really a sun which looks like a moon.. and all the same for a poem. The haiku is art metamorphosis from the impressions made in this mind by viewing the photo and reading the comment of silver's that you relayed. The photo (of the SUN ) and the comment are each in their own right .. snapshots of zen moments .. relaying impressions of that which arises .. the way I choose tovdescribe it anyway. Thats it from me tonight .. using a cellphone is not my device of choice .. keep up the haiku!
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Post by zin on May 25, 2016 4:08:26 GMT -5
That's good too! It's really a sun which looks like a moon.. and all the same for a poem. The haiku is art metamorphosis from the impressions made in this mind by viewing the photo and reading the comment of silver's that you relayed. The photo (of the SUN ) and the comment are each in their own right .. snapshots of zen moments .. relaying impressions of that which arises .. the way I choose tovdescribe it anyway. Thats it from me tonight .. using a cellphone is not my device of choice .. keep up the haiku! Thank you!
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Post by justlikeyou on May 27, 2016 16:55:18 GMT -5
All right but it is very difficult for me! I managed to keep to it for only two lines: sitting at the pond mosquito army attacks thunderbolt hits them Is thunderbolt a British bug repellant?
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Post by zin on May 27, 2016 19:59:08 GMT -5
All right but it is very difficult for me! I managed to keep to it for only two lines: sitting at the pond mosquito army attacks thunderbolt hits them Is thunderbolt a British bug repellant? I don't know, maybe you should ask a British person .. The image just came into my mind - the mosquitos were very astonished (but it didn't kill them) Btw I will consider 17 syllables in any number of lines. Presently I am only looking for *some* limitation.. (I wouldn't wish to spoil the 5-7-5 thread though.. maybe I'll put those here)
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Post by justlikeyou on May 28, 2016 8:43:18 GMT -5
gulls & twilight - photo haiku Haiga is the art form of combining image and haiku. Basho is well known for it. It began in Japan c1600 with watercolors on rice paper but now includes photos, drawing etc. The image should compliment the poem but not directly relate to/or explain the poem. Examples here at haigaonline.comThen there is haibunga. It is a relatively new art form that combines haiku, image and prose.
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Post by laughter on May 28, 2016 12:07:20 GMT -5
Yes all poetry... and I think when it is in favor of simplicity rules *can* be flexible! About the pic - it is jly's.. I will put one with a different flavor (silver said rich people would buy it!) : Hehe .. the rich buy a path to the moon
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