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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 9, 2015 11:27:09 GMT -5
I've noticed in the past that when selecting a picture, the code can come different ways.. and that there can be issues with the longer format (yours) img alt=" " src="https://lh3.googleusercontent.com/uTKM-7jnjN07IAY-_YHjODVPjlm_nJKlisNMdm6k32QKJhuRR-ZAlMvLt99aN4xJhB1SZh2ojKCqiJjqApTrwpWy_6hj7ASeQ_GujZDmxEpM0GCxuaqb10KSv7JHUiZvVyeJJVToLbKskiZ384wJ_mKbk2w7Rg2TNoulWf-qftwTLf_jLAxzHRXIZm5fP1eRJWQcBuTMhknbV2T30JaM1QsOezEjXSoEAkaPALIhNxplwROcgHw_-uWUKND9_Z9qw7T7p5BIhLo-exnfnBHY9F6M691Rj8hupnbrPwJakjXzEmAkmgrihSokfl93GybXbbcvcc-ebbLaDO6DbUL8tshoh8s6UmkF9Gy9KjpzZTHzTDlfKrc5VrfytX0JgQUuC5JvYcZjEI4LVBYN_xnQKgJ8EVVRhnpn11_x_DuSYYgkmYpDR_eB_vWuxeo1AzBc4pc_aR7w9jdBLhOcPixHRdMqPI1K3LVaHV4pAgYTKnE6BbUEk1Ks_FfuBJ_PPrf1UAXF8eLINzDcCmbFTzI7n_25S1ISpUO07MKaAEPo5_s=w908-h681-no" style="max-width:100%;" (mine) htt://www.quotehd.com/imagequotes/authors77/tmb/herman-melville-novelist-it-is-not-down-in-any-map-true-places-never.jpg I see. Thank you. I've taken to using "photobucket" for that very reason but they were down when I went there earlier with this last pic so I resorted to my google photo hosting. They do have very long code. Maybe I'll switch the hosting location for this one later on.
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Post by zin on Oct 14, 2015 15:01:21 GMT -5
Re:
"The Hen Lays"
in autumn air a rifle cracks- the labored egg
(jly)
Curious, are you allowed to put titles?
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 20, 2015 17:35:12 GMT -5
Re: "The Hen Lays" in autumn air a rifle cracks- the labored egg (jly) Curious, are you allowed to put titles? Yes, titles are allowed but it would be best that the title is not a repeat of anything already in the poem. For example, if your poem is discussing a cat, a ball of yarn, in the backyard sun, think outside the box (not the litter box ;-) and come up with something related but not already mentioned. This would apply to photos when used as well. It should be related but not a repeat of any other element already stated.
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 20, 2015 17:35:51 GMT -5
Matsuo Basho advises his disciples
"Learn from the Pine!"
To do that you must leave behind you all subjective prejudice. Otherwise you will force your own self onto the object and can learn nothing from it. Your poem will well-up of its own accord when you and the object become one, when you dive deep enough into the object, to discover something of its hidden glimmer.
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Post by zin on Oct 20, 2015 17:43:55 GMT -5
Re: "The Hen Lays" in autumn air a rifle cracks- the labored egg (jly) Curious, are you allowed to put titles? Yes, titles are allowed but it would be best that the title is not a repeat of anything already in the poem. For example, if your poem is discussing a cat, a ball of yarn, in the backyard sun, think outside the box (not the litter box ;-) and come up with something related but not already mentioned. This would apply to photos when used as well. It should be related but not a repeat of any other element already stated. Good advice! thank you. I wondered if title could be an extra line when what you want to say is long.. I think: maybe.. I will try it sometime.
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 20, 2015 18:33:27 GMT -5
Yes, titles are allowed but it would be best that the title is not a repeat of anything already in the poem. For example, if your poem is discussing a cat, a ball of yarn, in the backyard sun, think outside the box (not the litter box ;-) and come up with something related but not already mentioned. This would apply to photos when used as well. It should be related but not a repeat of any other element already stated. Good advice! thank you. I wondered if title could be an extra line when what you want to say is long.. I think: maybe.. I will try it sometime. Considered a BIG no no in the haiku world of publication and contest judging
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Post by zin on Oct 21, 2015 6:13:47 GMT -5
Good advice! thank you. I wondered if title could be an extra line when what you want to say is long.. I think: maybe.. I will try it sometime. Considered a BIG no no in the haiku world of publication and contest judging Well, shame on me, the discourteous opportunist! In any case, nice to hear about the haiku world .
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Post by Deleted on Oct 23, 2015 14:59:36 GMT -5
elms are on fire memory of the summer burning red to blue Beautiful trees. Nice first two lines. If you want to get a little more technical try for two separate images in your haiku that don't refer to each other. Your pics offers several options; blue sky, passing cars, shadows, green grass or any other observation or feeling you had when in the moment and use it. To give you an idea, you could say something like: elms on fire memories of summer- the speeding car or elms on fire memories of summer- the crow caws or not I took "blue" to mean.. sad that fall be leaving, and winter be a coming but as for both of our poetry critiques...
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 23, 2015 15:08:27 GMT -5
Beautiful trees. Nice first two lines. If you want to get a little more technical try for two separate images in your haiku that don't refer to each other. Your pics offers several options; blue sky, passing cars, shadows, green grass or any other observation or feeling you had when in the moment and use it. To give you an idea, you could say something like: elms on fire memories of summer- the speeding car or elms on fire memories of summer- the crow caws or not I took "blue" to mean.. sad that fall be leaving, and winter be a coming but as for both of our poetry critiques... Beautiful trees. Nice first two lines. If you want to get a little more technical try for two separate images in your haiku that don't refer to each other. Your pics offers several options; blue sky, passing cars, shadows, green grass or any other observation or feeling you had when in the moment and use it. To give you an idea, you could say something like: elms on fire memories of summer- the speeding car or elms on fire memories of summer- the crow caws or not I took "blue" to mean.. sad that fall be leaving, and winter be a coming but as for both of our poetry critiques... Yes, I agree. But "fire" in the first line relates to "burning" in the third. He certainly could find a different way of saying the same thing that keeps the two parts from touching....but only if he wants to
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Post by zin on Oct 23, 2015 15:09:30 GMT -5
Methinks goat's expression is better! (the pics)
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Post by Deleted on Oct 23, 2015 15:22:58 GMT -5
speaking of two parts... what's up wit dat?
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 23, 2015 15:28:11 GMT -5
speaking of two parts... what's up wit dat? From Haikuguy.com How many parts does it have? Though it can be presented on the page in three lines, a traditional Japanese haiku of Issa's era structurally consists of two parts with a pause in between. Its power as poetry often derives from juxtaposition of the two images and the sense of surprise or revelation that the second image produces. A good haiku is like a good joke: the set-up (image 1), then the punch line (image 2). An example from Issa: spring rain-- the uneaten ducks are quacking Two images appear: (1) spring rain falling, (2) the ducks that have survived the cooking pots of winter quacking. Considered alone, each image doesn't amount to much of a poem. But set side-by-side, the rain and the ducks make a powerful, celebratory statement about life, survival, and the promise of spring. Check out more here
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Post by Deleted on Oct 23, 2015 15:30:05 GMT -5
*burp*
I meant where you quoted me twice in the same post
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 23, 2015 15:34:42 GMT -5
*burp* I meant where you quoted me twice in the same post Dunno. Pretend it never happened...either of the two happenings
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Post by Deleted on Oct 23, 2015 15:52:20 GMT -5
Methinks goat's expression is better! (the pics) I think it was the burp guy that sent Siver screaming away to the Bhuddhy forum and the goat is the consequence of a curse, so we don't want to talk about that
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