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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 22, 2017 19:11:31 GMT -5
The poem should suggest a scene or setting, but not dictate the specifics. Too much "tell" leaves the reader with nothing to contribute. Successful haiku is a successful collaboration between reader and writer. In the following example, the poem gives just enough information to get the basic ideas across, but there is also sufficient openness to allow the reader to fill in the blanks with scene settings, discovery of meaning or multiple meanings, etc, using their own imaginatory powers. This is the desired collaboration. Balanced just right, between telling too much and telling too little, a writer could potentially provoke as many possibilities as there are readers.
crossword breakfast
they chew over
a four letter word
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Post by krsnaraja on Oct 22, 2017 19:41:25 GMT -5
Dinner table for two
A lighted candle
Brightened with woe
In silence bestow
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Post by krsnaraja on Oct 22, 2017 20:01:00 GMT -5
The poem should suggest a scene or setting, but not dictate the specifics. Too much "tell" leaves the reader with nothing to contribute. Successful haiku is a successful collaboration between reader and writer. In the following example, the poem gives just enough information to get the basic ideas across, but there is also sufficient openness to allow the reader to fill in the blanks with scene settings, discovery of meaning or multiple meanings, etc, using their own imaginatory powers. This is the desired collaboration. Balanced just right, between telling too much and telling too little, a writer could potentially provoke as many possibilities as there are readers. crossword breakfast they chew over a four letter word soup opera in crab meat with sizzling steak sonnata |
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Post by laughter on Oct 23, 2017 2:23:50 GMT -5
The poem should suggest a scene or setting, but not dictate the specifics. Too much "tell" leaves the reader with nothing to contribute. Successful haiku is a successful collaboration between reader and writer. In the following example, the poem gives just enough information to get the basic ideas across, but there is also sufficient openness to allow the reader to fill in the blanks with scene settings, discovery of meaning or multiple meanings, etc, using their own imaginatory powers. This is the desired collaboration. Balanced just right, between telling too much and telling too little, a writer could potentially provoke as many possibilities as there are readers. crossword breakfast they chew over a four letter word many shoulds and knots walk outside in the night air look up, breath in, out |
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 23, 2017 6:57:05 GMT -5
The poem should suggest a scene or setting, but not dictate the specifics. Too much "tell" leaves the reader with nothing to contribute. Successful haiku is a successful collaboration between reader and writer. In the following example, the poem gives just enough information to get the basic ideas across, but there is also sufficient openness to allow the reader to fill in the blanks with scene settings, discovery of meaning or multiple meanings, etc, using their own imaginatory powers. This is the desired collaboration. Balanced just right, between telling too much and telling too little, a writer could potentially provoke as many possibilities as there are readers. crossword breakfast they chew over a four letter word many shoulds and knots walk outside in the night air look up, breath in, out Sorry, my mistake. I thought you had asked about it. Please disregard. tell me about it
yes, I really want to hear
listening is art
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Post by laughter on Oct 23, 2017 10:41:36 GMT -5
many shoulds and knots walk outside in the night air look up, breath in, out Sorry, my mistake. I thought you had asked about it. Please disregard. tell me about it
yes, I really want to hear
listening is art
no right no wrong .. so appologies shall dissolve in the space between |
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 24, 2017 10:25:21 GMT -5
Yup, nothing wrong with free styling it or writing other types of short poetry besides haiku.
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Post by laughter on Oct 24, 2017 11:31:57 GMT -5
top hat, nose up .. ** sniff **
the monocle in the eye
polished black heal turn
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 24, 2017 13:32:51 GMT -5
top hat, nose up .. ** sniff ** the monocle in the eye polished black heal turn Did you mean heel? In any case, interesting image. The Monopoly Man comes to mind. Not sure of the point though. |
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 24, 2017 13:56:47 GMT -5
FWIW, here is an interesting primer on haiku some might find interesting. It is written by Jane Reichhold, a giant in haiku world, once invited to the Emperor of Japan's New Years Party, in recognition in her expertise in, and translation of Japanese haiku. Bare Bones School of Haiku |
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Post by krsnaraja on Oct 24, 2017 15:59:20 GMT -5
I was sitting on the bowl
suddenly the roof and floor
trembled
For several seconds I was
humbled
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Post by justlikeyou on Oct 24, 2017 17:10:12 GMT -5
I was sitting on the bowl suddenly the roof and floor trembled For several seconds I was humbled That is an interesting report k. It's something a witness might say after an earthquake, but it isn't haiku. To write haiku, as it is (mis) understood by the public generally, is to at least do as Laughter is doing, write a 3 line poem of 5, then 7, then 5 syllables. That is, 5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second line, then 5 syllables again in the third line. If you look at Laughter's poems you will see that is what he is doing. It's a good place to start perhaps, if you wish to write haiku. If not, keep on keepin on. :-) |
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Post by krsnaraja on Oct 24, 2017 18:41:01 GMT -5
I was sitting on the bowl suddenly the roof and floor trembled For several seconds I was humbled That is an interesting report k. It's something a witness might say after an earthquake, but it isn't haiku. To write haiku, as it is (mis) understood by the public generally, is to at least do as Laughter is doing, write a 3 line poem of 5, then 7, then 5 syllables. That is, 5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second line, then 5 syllables again in the third line. If you look at Laughter's poems you will see that is what he is doing. It's a good place to start perhaps, if you wish to write haiku. If not, keep on keepin on. :-) Doctor's in pain Injects morphine in his vein Given laughs again |
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Post by laughter on Oct 25, 2017 5:00:03 GMT -5
I was sitting on the bowl suddenly the roof and floor trembled For several seconds I was humbled That is an interesting report k. It's something a witness might say after an earthquake, but it isn't haiku. To write haiku, as it is (mis) understood by the public generally, is to at least do as Laughter is doing, write a 3 line poem of 5, then 7, then 5 syllables. That is, 5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second line, then 5 syllables again in the third line. If you look at Laughter's poems you will see that is what he is doing. It's a good place to start perhaps, if you wish to write haiku. If not, keep on keepin on. :-) cliches are cliches deep pools of water collect where giants walked |
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Post by laughter on Oct 25, 2017 5:07:59 GMT -5
the fabric of mind
so fluid, ephemeral
judges don't dare touch
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